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The Keepers
Keeping something that isn’t really there.

Aya’s lilac eyes shot open and franticly darted around to see where she was. There was a oversized redwood desk in one corner of the room with three chairs around it, padded with a soft velvet. Smiling diminutively, she realized that she was in the study. Her favorite room in the whole house. She was once again at the window watching the black snow fall from the blood red sky. The infatuation of it was so intense, that everything else seemed unimportant and it wore her down rapidly. The very way that the snow fell was astonishing.

Aya was one of the Keepers, their whole purpose in life was to remember the past. Even though she was only fifteen she still had to bear the burden of the worlds mistakes. She was trapped with the memories of all the pain that the people had felt while dieing under the sun. Keepers are rare, but you know when one is born because colour will change and show its true form, but only for a second.  If you’re watching you will notice. Almost everyone has white eyes with a thin gold ring in the center. Well, everyone but the Keepers, who have light purple colored eyes with explosions of blue throughout. Aya leaned her back on the window and let out a deep sigh. Letting her mind drift off to the distressing past.  People were happily living out their life, like nothing had ever changed.

The human species had discovered that by drilling into the sun spots, they would be able to produce a new kind of raw power based on the suns magnetic field. Humans craved this raw power more and more. They began to harvest the sun like it was another one of their crops. They took so much that they threw the sun off its proper orbit. Realizing what would happen next they began to mine the ice caps, so that they could be sent to cool off the sun at a pacific time of the year; winter. But the sun was already beginning to take its toll on the humans. They were having their eyes slowly burned. They managed to stop this process with a shot of liquid iron, placed directly into the eye. The eyes turned a milky white, with a thin ring of gold in the center. But they did not go blind. Every colour went into its negative form.

Aya knew all of this from the second that she was born. She wasn’t taught this. She didn’t read it in a book. It was just something that came with being a keeper. Because she had violet eyes she was an outcast, a memory bank for the weak, a Keeper. They had the highest level of respect. No one was ever to talk to a Keeper about the past, it just simply wasn’t allowed. If one ever tried to tell someone with a golden ring about the worlds history they were taken away.

Aya’s attention turned back to the window. She started to watch the dark dreary snow slowly drift down from the sky. Suddenly one of the snowflakes flickered a blinding white! Aya was so taken back by this that she almost fell off the window seat. Aya pressed her hot cheeks against the cool glass trying to find the one snowflake that flickered its true colour but it had disappeared into the obis. Aya slumped back into her seat depressed. Aya got up and started to walk out of the room. When she got to the door she couldn’t help but check one more time to see if the snow was once again white. But just like she expected, it was black. Just how everyone else saw it.
©2004-2009 ~0-bunny-0
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I try to write a variety of different stories and this is my attempted at a science fiction.

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:iconjessfiness:
this is incredible! this makes my poetry seem like the cheap, hurried words it really is, but this is really really beautiful. I would love to see more of this story, if the muses so inspire.

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there's a string that runs through our bad days and if you pull that string real tight, the days all crumble together and all that you see is night ...okkervil river
:iconhiram-easton-saime:
Uh, the sun orbits? You're referring to the earth's orbit around the sun, right? ...Heliocentricism... heliocentricism... and I think that putting iron into one's eyes, especially molten iron, would be rather detrimental to their overall health... Tee-hee. Also, why would this cause the polarity of light to reverse as such? I want to find out more. I mean, it is science fiction. You can stretch the truth. I'm just thinking out loud... but I like it so far. Keep it up...

I must, however, congratulate you on your grammar. It's much, much better than a lot of other people I've read here...

Oh, and I almost forgot to mention... Aya draws all her knowledge a priori, [just like Kant describes in "A Critique of Pure Reason"] and it's interesting... Does she ever doubt it? Something which is a priori is something that you know from the moment you're born, and it requires no doubt becuase it seems to be that way all the time. Like motion. Motion is a priori. It's impossible to think of life without it. So, does Aya accept all this as being a priori?
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Wow! :faint: Thank you *blink, blink* I have never had a single comment on my grammar or spelling in my entire life 0_0 and I have to say with tear filled eyes that I can not take credit for either of those things. Since this story was for a school project it was checked by the teacher. Since two people have found this story and liked it more then my other ones, I will try and get back in to the frame of mind that I was in when I wrote it. With the story I really had no idea what I was talking about >_> this story was more of a sleepless ranting that I get into sometimes, just this one turned out better then the rest. The good thing is that my teacher bought all of my :blahblah: and gave me a good mark. Thank you :love: for you comment anyways its just that I would feel really bad if I didn’t tell you the truth. :no:

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:iconhiram-easton-saime:
So... many... moving faces... CONFUSION!
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An interesting prospect. However, nothing can survive near Sol. I respect the fact that this is your first Science Fiction story, but you should research the Sun before writing on it. Removing mass from the sun would cause it to expand rapidly, engulfing Earth. A Star is a constant battle between gravity, wanting to crush the star inward, and the nuclear fission, wanting to burst outward. By removing Mass you decrease gravity, thus disturbing the balance, thus causing the Star to explode outward.

Anyway, its very good for a first attempt. I would like to see you write more about the Keepers.

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If you kill them, they will die.

The piggy bank is a lesson in communism. You have to smash the poor ceramic pig to get to your money. The pig dies for the greater good.

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